When
I was a kid, my Daddy taught my brothers and me how to play chess. Only
one brother excelled after the first lessons, but the introduction to
the game was exhilarating, like the opportunity to make fancy moves
(oh, that space is open, so I can move my knight!) and to take the
opponent’s queen. What fun!Later we learned that chess is a game of strategy and the player doesn’t move pieces without a plan. Some strategies are used many times and have names such as a fianchetto bishop or back rank checkmate. To maneuver into these board structures takes several accepted moves that your opponent will recognize with the very first move.
Magic drives the story:
Some writers are still in the learning stage (from which I never emerged as a chess player) where the intrigue rests with executing exotic moves. The purpose of writing is to explore the uses of magic.
The
(often charming) development of magic systems in these stories
overwhelms the plot and serves to engage the reader on its own level –
sometimes a cloying banquet of magic where the love story or the need
for a final battlefield are tertiary.I place The Last Airbender and Percy Jackson in this category.
Magic enlivens the story:
Some writers have stepped past the stage of fun with magic and use the presence of characters with magic to drive the plot. These writers are similar to chess players who have studied some famous chess strategies and want to employ them in a match. One rule of thumb to recognize this type of writer is that the magic is similar from one series to the next – because the strategies are similar.I place Eragon and How to Train Your Dragon in this category; formula writing using well-established plot points that delight audience expectation. But we know the outcome by page 60 because we know the strategy with the opening move.
Magic inserted just because we can:
In
Theft of Swords by Sullivan, an entire early sequence was about
rescuing a wizard from a prison that nobody had succeeded at opening
for two centuries. The descriptions were fun and the logical problems
intriguing. But when the wizard is free, he says thanks and leaves. I
suppose he returns later to return the favor, but I didn’t get that far.I read (part of) Throne of the Crescent Moon due to a recommendation from Kirkus Reviews. I suppose the readers at Kirkus are jaded and liked the story because the setting, and therefore the magic, was oriental. But the magic was everywhere, in every scene used by every character. I couldn’t follow the story – but I also couldn’t follow Battlestar Galactica, so go figure.
Magic provides a strong ending:
The duel with the basilisk in one of the Harry Potter books is an example of overcoming the raging opponent, after which all questions are settled and Harry can return to Hogwarts or the next term with a fresh slate. And the final duel with Lord Voldemort that winds up the series is a great example of using magic to bring all influences to a conclusion.
Magic is often tamped down in this type of story by the limitations of the user, but serves as deus ex machina in the story climax or end of a trilogy. I enjoyed The Daughter of the Forest trilogy by Juliet Marillier and cried for the last 60 pages of the first story – something about swans and sacrifice to end a curse.
Marillier’s novels included elements of formula, though, just like with chess moves. A ingénue who is touch by magic but ignorant of its uses, guided by a would-be lover with unwavering devotion, an unrelenting female opponent, along with benign spirits and druids with little to do. Sound familiar?
The third story titled Child of Prophecy repeats these elements for a third generation while the milieu remains static. The climax is a battlefield, of course, where our ingénue enters without a plan, without her magic, and without a weapon, encouraged by spirits to “fake it”. Of course, the gods have a place for her that is not hinted at earlier in the trilogy (that I won’t reveal here), and the gods make all the combatants awestruck while our heroine performs her final farewells to family.
Magic is used sparingly or when necessary:
Some writers use magic to change the story rather than to bolster the story, a subtle difference. I enjoyed reading The Bone Doll’s Twin by Lynn Flewelling, especially the first story that sets up the curse – much like Snow White except the agent of the curse is helpful rather than mean. The reversal of the curse came (close to) the middle of the trilogy and included gender questions for girls-with-swords, so I was intrigued.
The
final story Hidden Warrior has an inserted holy man from a different
culture who happens along the road at an opportune moment to serve the
hero, but he wanders off before the final battle. Once the initial
curse was alleviated, the presence of magic was not essential, so the
inserted holy man was a maneuver (like in chess) where the reader can
see the rationale.Magic as a developed system:
Brandon Sanderson: ‘nuff said.The only issue I have with the entire story depending on uses of magic by good guys and bad guys, that Sanderson calls “hard magic”, is that the story becomes predictable, even repetitive. The characters are dependent on skills or discipline to save them and have few other interests.
The Fantastic Four fits this category. Even the bad guy has a power, but must use it in certain ways with specific limitations. The plot revolves around how to trip him up on his own special power.
Magic from a master:
I’m
currently reading The Blade Itself (Book I of a trilogy), which is
long. Joe Abercrombie uses magic to build the plot and keep the reader
engaged. His scenes are episodic (irritating), and too involved with
the details of torture (revolting), but the reader feels the cold rain
and sword cuts (shows good choices).Magic is used at surprising moments and differently than a rehash for training dragons. A campfire has a spirit that he can tamp under his tongue to light the next campfire: he, he, he. I’m not but 48% through the book (did I mention that it’s long?), but I have hope that this chess match begins a new strategy that has yet to be named.
I should have thought ahead and allowed a bad guy to escape as George Lucas did in Star Wars when Darth Vadar survived the destruction of the Death Star. This villain returns to trouble the rebel forces in a later story.
By way of comparison, JRR Tolkien wrote The Hobbit as a stand-alone novel and embarked on the LOTR series only after the success of the first book.
For example, Robin Hobb wrote the Farseer series, followed by the Liveship
series. I could see hints that she would combine the two because the
worlds were similar enough to become tangent. The Farseer series
mentions stone dragons and memory stones, but real dragons are
introduced later as part of the reader learning more about the milieu.
In The Curse of Chalion
by Lois MacMasters Bujold, the ingénue Iselle wins her true love and
plot points are tucked in nicely after the bad guy dies. The following
book Palladin of Souls follows the adventures of tangent
characters so that Iselle who became a ruler of the kingdom, and Caz,
the narrator of Book I, are only mentioned in the later stories. Bujold
has a tendency to provide character studies within an otherworld with
several planets (or castles) and several tangent sets of characters
rather than the growth of one hero/heroine during a war or regime
change.
In Magic Study,
I think it was, Book III of a series by Maria Snyder, the main
characters travel over a mountain pass to speak with a sibyl and meet a
new tribe who happen to show miniature dragons as a curio, much like
the baby dragons in (which one, Book V??) of Harry Potter that never re-enter the story. Here are fantasy elements that titillates but are left undeveloped.
So
I finished a sustained writing effort and felt euphoria from working
consistently with characters and scenes. (200 pages! Yeah!) I wanted to
share my elation and found my artist friend to explain what I had
accomplished. He said, “I’m glad you finished your piece.” And that was
it.Later he caught up with me and wanted to expand his response.
“It’s just that I have not read the book, and I don’t know what you
mean.” I told him my theory about process frustration that all artists
feel, but novelists feel in spades.
Signs of Process Frustration:
Another
choice is to find friends among writers and trade stories and chapters
for critique. One recommended source is the fantasy writers group on
I have found that discussing craftsmanship
with fellow artists, some from tangent disciplines, helps with
articulating method, constraints, signals for poor choices, finding
satisfaction, learning from finished products, avoiding bad critiques.
The chats about craft are often conceptual rather than practical, but
serve as an area where we can at least admit the pressures and face the
long stretches of time spent alone.